Analysis of Script by Saena Yi read 1-16-06

STORY: (permission not yet acquired to reveal story or title)

READING: At Alameda Writers Group (www.alamedawritersgroup.org) special interest group gathering.

MESSAGE: A suburban David can conquer a mean Goliath with enought determination.

WIN: Fun and funny (even the writer laughed throughout the reading). The writer showed us a supernatural ability I've never seen before. Refreshing change from dysfunctional -- one character had it totally together, was very able, had a strong sense of ethics and regarded his duty as paramount despite being in what others might stereotypically put down as a blue collar job, and brought honor to that job.

LOSE: Promoted drinking to have a good time (bar scene.) Slight mention of a therapist attempting to handle a fear -- saving grace was that the therapist failed. The main character's emotional arc went rapidly from apathy to enthusiasm without some natural pit stops such as anger.

EFFECT ON ME: I learned a lot about how to write comedy that works. I laughed a lot and was cheerful (as were others at the reading). It made me appreciate the honor I can bring to my day-to-day jobs and my life.

Sincerely,
Becky